ROUND THREE COMMENTS1. Renata vs áResonanceROUND THREE COMMENTS by RobinRone
COMMENTS FOR RENATA
BagnaTheSupervillan: áThis entry handled the interactions between Resonance and Renata very well, and the unstable partnership based on glamours, manipulation, and deceit they form by the end provides an interesting situation to explore in future rounds. My biggest complaint about the entry would probably be that it didn't have much focus on any particular story or theme, though the manipulation and deceit going on among all the characters worked pretty well to make the different parts feel fairly unified. This entry was another solid chapter in what's shaping up to be a pretty good story.
Lithicbee: áThis was an interesting entry that contained some subtle and clever plotting. When Thoth brought Renata to Resonance and Koba, I thought, “There better be a payoff for this, because it makes no sense for him to do that.” By the end, I accepted that by putting her there, he took both her and Resonance off the pla
Round 3 P4For the first time in a long time, Thoth allowed himself to sigh. He was…tired. Was that the word for it? Funny, he wasn’t actually sure that he could tell. He had lived so long with mind and emotions carefully neutral, he had lost his ability to take note of the state of his own body. To think, even gods had to worry about such things during the worst of times. It troubled him that that was what this was.Round 3 P4 by PidgeonToe
He looked out onto the wide, dark plains of Hades. He could only see so much from where he stood, but through his books and scrolls, he had seen through the eyes of every mortal and monster that had ever walked those fields, and so knew every speck of dirt, every blade of grass. Every heart, every mind, every soul. And all the terrible imbalance they were burdened with.
For others, it might have just been the natural state of things. The world was not an ordered place, they thought, and to assume otherwise was na´ve. Thoth knew better. This was not the natural way of thi